高考英语作文范文第1篇
Form
done being done having been done 过去分词表示被动含义，或者动作已经完成。
1. The children ran out of the room, laughing and talking merrily. 2. Having finished his homework, he went out. 3. Given more attention, the trees could have grown better. 4. Having been elected as chairman, he felt great pressure. 5. Interested / Being interested in music, he always goes to the concert. 6. Most of the people invited to the party were famous scientists. Exercise: 划出上面句中的过去分词，并指出它在句中做何成分。
过去分词做状语：
过去分词前可带when, although, while, if, unless等词， 使分词短语与主句关系更清楚。 1.When ________(open) for business, the hamburger stand was immediately filled with customers. 2.Unless ________(invite) to speak, you should keep silent at the conference. 3.Although ________(tell) many times, Tom forgot to buy milk again. 4.If _________(leave)alone on a desert island, what would you do? 比较过去分词与现在分词做状语：选出正确的句子 1. Seeing from the hill, the city is beautiful. 2. Seen from the hill, the city is beautiful. 3. Looking down from the hill, they saw many red roofs. 4. Heating to 100℃, water boils. 5. Heated to 100 ℃, water boils. 6. Being hot, we went to have a swim. 7. It being hot, we went to have a swim. 8. Because it was hot, we went to have a swim.
过去分词做定语：
1.a __________ (worry) look 2.a __________(puzzle) expression 3.This is a picture _______(paint) by my father. 4.__________(pollute) water is harmful to people’s health.
Exercise: Rewrite the sentence(1) 1. It is a letter which was written in pencil. 2. The letter which /that was mailed last night will reach him tomorrow. 3.The bridge which was built 100 years ago is still in good condition. 4. The teachers are talking about the problem which /that was discussed at the meeting .
Exercise：Rewrite the sentence(2) 1. When he was left alone, the boy began to cry.
2.Kroc was impressed by the cleanliness, service and food, so he looked up at the name over the hamburger stand.
3.Although it was started six years earlier, in 1948, McDonald’s was still a small business.
4.Though I admit what you say, I still think you should meet him.
5. As I didn’t know her address, I could not write to her.
Exercise: choose the best answers 1.When ______ help, one often says “Thank you.” or “It’s kind of you.”
A. offering
B. to offer
C. to be offered
D. offered 2._____ in the mountains for a week, the two students were finally saved by the local police.
A. Having lost
B. Lost
C. Being lost
D. Losing 3.Linda worked for the Minnesota Manufacturing and Mining Company,___as 3M.
A. knowing
B. known
C. being known
D. to be known 4.______ the program, they have to stay there for another
two weeks.
A. Not completing
B. Not completed
C. Not having completed
D. Having not completed 5.Oil prices have risen by 32 percent since the start of this year,_____ a record US$57.65.
A. have reached
B. reaching
C. to reach
D. to be reaching 6._____ his books and clothes into a trunk, he came downstairs.
A. Packed B. Having packed
C. Being packed
D. Packing 7._____ long ago, the letter was illegible.
A. Written
B. Having written
C. To have been written
D. Be written 8._____ much education, the poor woman wasn’t able to find a good job.
A. Having not had
B. Not having had
C. Having not
D. Not had 9._____, it should never be pointed at anyone.
A. When carrying a gun
B. Carried a gun
C. With a gun carrying
D. When you carry a gun. 10.When _____ different cultures, we often pay attention only
to the differences without noticing the many similarities.
A. compared
B. being compared
C. comparing
D. having compared 11. ____ enough time, they finished their work better than expected.
A. Giving
B. Given
C. Being given
D. Give 12. The palace, ______ down in 1485, was never rebuilt.
A. burnt
B. having burnt
C. to be burnt
D. burning 13. ______ some of this juice--- perhaps you’ll like it.
A. Trying
B. Try
C. To try
D. Have tried 14. Most of the artists ______ to the party were from South Africa.
A. invited
B. to invite
C. being invited
D. had been invited 15. Having been attacked by terrorists, __________. A. doctors came to their rescue
B. the tall building collapsed C. an emergency measure was taken
D. warning were given to tourists 16._______ with video tape-recorders, MP3 players _______ far better. A.Compared „sell
B. To compare...will sell C. Comparing„is sold
D. Being compared„sell 17. _______ the host call her name, her heart started to beat fiercely(猛烈地). A .Hearing B When hearing
C Heard
D When she heard 18. After _______ , our school took on a new look. A. redecorating
B being redecorated
C. having redecorated
D having been redecorated 19.(04江苏)The old man,_________ abroad for twenty years, is on the way back to his motherland. A. to work
B. working C.to have worked
D. having worked 20. (04广西) Reading is an experience quite different from watching TV; There are pictures ______ in your mind instead of before your eyes. A .to form
B.form
C.forming
D.having formed 21.(03春招)The manager, _______ his factory’s products were poor in quality, decided to give his workers further training. A. knowing
B.known
C.to know D.being known Exercise：fill in the blanks with the proper forms of the given words. 1. Many things _________(consider) impossible in the past are common today. 2. He was disappointed to find his suggestion ______(refuse). 3. The film _________(show) next month is very ______(touch). 4. The bridge __________(build) now will be finished next month. 5. Most of the people ___________( invite) to the party were famous scientists. 6. _________(see) his mother, the baby could not help _______(laugh) 7. _________(give) more attention, the trees will grow better. 8. The machine wants ___________(repair). 9. How dare you go in without __________ (invite). 10.The patient was warned ____________ (not eat) oily food after the operation. Exercise: translation 1. 李老师不允许学生在这条被污染的河里游泳。(过去分词做前置定语)
2.一看到那只熊，弟弟以感到害怕的声音大哭起来。(in…voice)(过去分词做前置定语)
3.那座建于300年前的寺庙每年吸引成千上万的游客。(过去分词短语做后置定语)
4.出生在大城市里的年轻人不习惯住在乡下。(过去分词短语做后置定语)
高考英语作文范文第2篇
[摘要]本文分析高三学生高考前的英语学习状况和英语作文存在的问题，重点论述教师指导考生备战高考英语的教学策略。通过背记英语范文、限时训练、教师面批的方法，有效地提高考生高考英语作文的卷面分数和写作水平。
[关键词]背诵范文 、 限时训练 、 教师面批 、学生写作能力的提高
一、调整学生考前的训练策略 新课标指出，英语教学的总体目标是培养学生的语言综合运用能力。写作是语言表达的最高形式，提高写作能力是语言教学追求的最高目标和境界。然而，在听、 说、 读、写四大技能中，写作一直是最容易被忽略的环节。在高考英语备考中，学生普遍存在这样一个误区：大部分学生的英语学习时间多花在语法单项选择题。因为单选题是客观题，只有唯一的答案，做对了有成功感。做错了费时不多，请教老师或同学，很容易得到满意的答复。但客观题注重考查考生的某个知识点在真实语境中的具体运用，尤其是语法知识点，讲究答案的唯一性，比较机械， 无法体会语言的活的灵魂。再讲，高考单选题的分值占全卷的15%，而书面表达却占25%。因此，考生考前的复习一定要调整学习策略，备战好英语书面表达，使该题目完全可能成为学生全卷分数的一个增值点。
二、 分析学生习作存在的问题，探索写作前的引导过程
高三毕业班的学生经过第一第二轮的语法专项和综合训练，学生积累了一定量的英语词汇，按理英语写作应该不成问题。然而，教师遇到的现象是‘听到写作学生畏难，改到作文教师犯难。”主要原因是学生的英语习作病句多，汉语式表达，表达不到位，复合句使用不当，个别学生依赖或借助电子辞典，文章全篇使用不常见、不通俗、修辞手法不妥的生词或词组，结尾段不够精悍和达意。结果学生的卷面分值只能大打节扣。因此，指导学生开篇布局十分重要。方法如下：(1).依据不同的文章体裁，启发提问学生应该采用何种主要时态。例如2005年广东高考作文看图写画，介绍中国经典成语故事守株待兔，其主要的时态是一般过去时。(2).引导提问学生采用何种人称。例如写日记务必用第一人称。(3).启发提问学生写作中应该使用哪些关键词、词组、复合句，筛选出学生认为合理的较喜欢的承上启下的词语，例如因果类：because, thanks to,时序类：firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally, 递进类：what’s more, to make the matters worse,并列类：and, as well as, 强调类：especially, 总结类：in short, in a word。该部分的词语，老师编写印发给学生背诵备用。(4).无论什么体裁的文章，尽量做到分段作文。以写三段文为好。文章的开首句要开门见山，层次分明，说理清楚。文章的结尾段要求考生会写出个人的观点和感悟。
三、强化背诵和听写范文，提高书面语的表达能力。 背诵英语范文能培养学生的语感，以形成对英语正确表达方式的认同感，对写作形成潜意识是有益的。中国人常讲：“读书破万卷，下笔如有神。”学习范文的益处可以帮助考生学习文中的用词造句，布局谋篇。为了不占用学生课余太多的时间，教师可以利用早读，每次30分钟。教师预先选印好各种体裁的文章印发给学生。每次早读课，先由教师点拨范文中的难词难句，妙词妙句，亮点和采分点。例如：范文中的中文句子“由于鱼不知饥饱，致使好多鱼因过度进食而死亡。”英文范文译它为“Some of the fish have been killed because they have no sense of being full.”句中“have no sense of”就是亮点和采分点。再如，有篇看图文章要求学生描写市民怎样清除街招，护花，修路等来美化城市。范文用这段话：Our citizens picked up waste paper，took off unsightly posters and weeded the garden. Some workers were busy fixing streetlamps，mending roads ，pruning bushes and painting fences aside.句中unsightly posters，prune bushes，weed the garden。均是课外知识，语言是“约定俗成” 1 的。我们写作就需要“入乡随俗”，多积累语言材料，做到厚积而薄发。再如，议论文的结尾，最好能呈现作者的观点和建议。例如，写反对浪费的文章，结尾可用这么一句：“In my opinion，we should call on more and more people to fight against waste. Only through these measures can we reduce waste. 一个倒装句足以令评卷老师眼前一亮而留下良好的印象，点评完毕，教师组织全班学生大声地朗读文章，然后各自背诵文章的范文。背诵强化了正确的语言文字的输入，对学生高考写出规范的英语很有效。最后教师给学生听写范文，这一符合认知规律的教学活动环节，帮助学生把已存在脑海里的东西有机地取出，适当地调整，为我所用，使学生有话可说，有东西可写。
四、限时训练，全收全改，点评鼓励。
越临近高考，教师越注意每周一次的堂上作文练习，增加学生的实践经验。教师让学生在规定的20～25分钟内模拟写一篇120～150字间的高考英语作文。这样做的好处是，学生在写作中体会诸如句式结构，词语搭配，提醒学生多留意谓语动词的构成形式。包括其使用的时态，语态，语气等。另外，误用关系代词和成份欠缺也是学生在写作中易犯的一个通病，需时时提防。学生只有通过堂上限时训练，应用范文例句，学会使用过渡词，连接词或其他一些衔接成份，注意首尾呼应，才能用好语言，真正提高英语写作水平。
学生作文完毕，教师要全收全改，改完要给学生一个明确的指示。诸如，文章时态用得对不对，那一句好，那一句欠什么，正确的应怎样表达，鼓励学生尽可能多地运用复杂的语法结构和词汇知识。如：非谓语动词形式，感叹句，介词短语，动词短语，以降低文章的枯燥乏味，增强文章的采分点。文章拥有灵活多样的表达手法，已成为高分作文的一道看点和亮点。 最后，教师给每个考生写一两句鼓励的话，以便使师生距离拉近，师生并肩作战。这一做法往往收到非常好的效果，使学生由厌写变得爱写，渴望成功。
综上所述，教师应按照新课程标准的要求，坚持有目的、有计划、有步骤地对学生进行系统的写作训练，让学生进行多种形式和多方面的书面表达练习，以达到学生真正地掌握书面表达的技巧，能用英语表达思想的目的。
高考英语作文范文第3篇
要点一：感谢
But for/without your help/ Make great progress / On account of /Live up to your expectations / have a good command of
1. how is everything going?
2. I’m writing to you to convey my heartfelt appreciation for your considerate help,I couldn’t have made great progress.
3.The gratitude from the bottom of my heart is
4. 5. However it was you,your perfect teaching skill thatme wonderful environment of English, but also a 6. What I can convey to you is endless thanks
7. Your rich experience and excellent teaching abilityme, which I will never forget
8. As your teaching methods are easilyEnglish.
9. When I was, the sentence you told me “where there is a will, there is a way ”often10. What you have devoted to us will be
11. Thank you for your knowledge, which It is your
12. the letter is my gratitude to you for your tender care and excellent education, which was the motivation for my study.
要点二：介绍中国春节
Attach importance to /look forward to/stand for/ have a perference for/ make a good impression /strike /dress up/ decorate our houses with lamps / have a passion for/ relax our exhausted body
1. and “10, 9, 8…”It us of a fact----New Year is coming. 3. Chinese believe that a thorough cleaning in the house will year to welcome good things in the new year.
4. It’s not only a time to relax and release stress, but also a time to keep touch with our relationship.
5. It means that winter will get away and spring is coming. No matter how busy you are, you should go back home and have a dinner with your relatives for a family reunion
No matter how far people are from their homes, they will try their best to come back home for the reunion dinner.
6. In a way, Spring Festival is not just a holiday when we can relax ourselves, but a ceremory of culture and social activities.
7. Some people will8. In the process, traditional cultural culture could be 9. People eat dumplings----which areYuan bao”. It means you will get money next year.
10. Our ancestors created the spring festival to say goodbye to the past year and to welcome the new arrival./ Celebrating the Spring Festival is a way to say “hello” to the new year, and say “goodbye “to the past year.
11. The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China, thousands of years ago.
12. People make it a rule to watch the Spring Festival Gala which lasts four hours
13. fireworks and crackers is also an important activity, which will bring us 要点三：邀请
Repay your kindness/ a wise choice
1. ’ll go to see you
2. Therefore, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that Spring Festival is a festival. It is a valuable culture and happy thing that Chinese enjoy. Because Spring Festival let us know what we want and what we need. Yes, it’s the family’s happiness.
3. Only by a Chinese environment, can you the true meaning of the festival
4.Were you given a chance, , I hope that you could come to China in person/ in the flesh to feel the happy atmosphere.
5. I’m you must be spellbound. Don’t hesitateand and pack up your luggage and experimece it in person
6. I would appreciate it if you can come to China to have an unforgetten time on your own. I believe that the memory in your mind will never .
高考英语作文范文第4篇
Dear Bob,
亲爱的鲍勃，
Yesterday I heard from you. I am very glad to be your pen friend. My name is Peter Zhang. I am sixteen years old. I live in...昨天我收到了你的来信，我很高兴成为你的笔友。我的名字叫张彼德。我今年十六岁，我住在......
I am amiddle school student, too. I like English and maths very much. I also like sports. I am good at singing. I know a little about America.Could you tell me something more about your country in your next letter?
我也是一名中学生，我非常喜欢英语和数学。我还喜欢体育运动，我很擅长唱歌。我对美国的了解不多，下次来信时能多跟我聊聊你们国家的事吗?
Please write to me soon.
期待着你的来信。
Yours
你的
Peter Zhang
张彼德
高考英语作文范文第5篇
高考材料作文常见类型
一.球王贝利在比赛中共射进1千多个球，有一次，当记者问他哪一个球最精彩时，他毫不犹豫地回答说：“下一个”。
二.
①夫夷以近，则游者众;险从远，则至者少。而世之奇伟、瑰怪，非常之观常在于险远，而人之所罕到焉，故非有志者不能至也。(王安石《游褒禅山记》)
②我不知道上了多少石级，一级又一级，是乐趣也是苦趣，好像从我有生命以来就在登山似的，迈前脚，拖后腿，才不过走完慢十八盘。(李健吾《雨中登泰山》) ③人们只要从汹涌浪涛中掌握了一条前进的途径，也就战胜大自然了。(刘白羽《长江三峡》)
三.有位名叫亚克敦的英国人，他的书斋里杂乱地排列着各种图书七万多卷，而且每卷书上都有他的手迹。他零零碎碎地记住了不少知识，可大家问他什么，他总是七扯八拉答不清楚，他活了六十多岁，读了一辈子书，却什么也没留下来，被人们称为“书橱”。
四.针对校园罚款问题，学校和社会上都有两种意见：一种意见认为不能罚，学生是消费者;另一种意见认为不但可以罚，还要重重地罚，罚得他心疼才会吸取教训。对此，你有何看法。
五.一次，美国通用电气公司的一台大型电机出了故障，技术人员修理了两个月，也未找到毛病。这时，一位瘸腿驼背的德国移民在电机旁仔细进行观测、记录、计算，时间不长，他用粉笔在电机外壳上画了一条线，很有把握地说：“打开电机，把划线处里面的线圈减少十六匝就好了。”许多人半信半疑，但按他的话做了以后，电机果真修好了。公司非常满意，经理问他要多少报酬，这人毫不客气地说：“划一条线一美元，知道在哪里划线，九千九百九十九美元。”周围的人听了深感吃惊，但精明的公司经理不但照付一万美元，而且还重金聘请了他做公司的顾问。他就是从小被人讪笑，而在逆境中顽强奋斗，最终登上科学高峰的人。
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知识改变命运，学习成就未来
六.有个人曾对茧破茧时的痛苦挣扎而于心不忍，于是用剪刀剪破茧壳使之早点出来，结果帮了倒忙，因为蛾只能爬一会儿就不寿而终了。
七.阅读《路灯刚刚灭掉》一文的开端部分，发挥合理想象，表现积极主题，续写情节的发展与结局。
要求：1.续写的情节与开端部分紧密衔接，自然发展。 2.以语言描写为主。 3.不超过400字。
路灯刚刚灭掉
每天当星星闪烁，月亮还挂在天边的时候，我便走上街头锻炼身体。
一日我锻炼完身体，来到一座立交桥上，刚好路灯灭掉，一切淹没在黑暗之中。突然，我听到两车相撞的声音，仔细看去，原来是一辆三轮车与一辆自行车撞在一起。自行车摔倒了，三轮车上的苹果也滚满了地。骑自行车的是个小伙子，骑三轮车的是个老头，两位站在那里一声也不吭。
我向前走了几步，虽然看不清却感觉到，他们都在怒目而视，看来一场争吵是不可避免的了。
审题立意练习
1. 阅读下面的文字，根据要求作文。
一位裁缝在吸烟时不小心将一条高档裙子烧了一个窟窿这，致使其成了废品。这位裁缝为了挽回损失，凭借其高超的技艺，在裙子四周剪了许多窟窿，并精心饰以金边，然后，将其取名为“金边凤尾裙”。不但卖了好价钱，还一传十，十传百，使不少女士上门求购，生意十分红火。 要求：全面理解材料，但可以从一个侧面、一个角度构思作文。自主确定立意，确定文体，确定标题;不要脱离材料内容或其含意范围作文，不要套作，不得抄袭。不少于600字。
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有一座直冲云霄的擎天峰。众多猴子受到了登山勇士的鼓舞，每年都要举行一次攀登擎天峰的体育竞赛，却从来没有任何一只猴子登上顶峰。
猴群中一位极有威望的长者说：“人，是宇宙之精华，是万物之主宰。尽管人有时比我们猴子爬的还低，但我们猴子永远爬不到人那样高。”众多猴子越来越相信，任何猴子都不可能登上擎天峰：
“登上擎天峰肯定不行!”
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“我们不能再做力所不能及的蠢事了!”
在这种舆论氛围的压力下，除了一只猴子还在坚持之外，其他的猴子开始泄气了，承认了自己的失败。最后，正是那只屡败屡战的猴子创造了奇迹，登上了擎天峰!
其他猴子都很想知道它究竟是怎么成功的，结果它们意外地发现：这只猴子原来是个聋子!
请根据你对以上材料的理解和体会，自选角度，写一篇作文。
要求：自定立意，自选文体，自拟题目，不少于800字。
“金边凤尾裙”材料作文的例文
【样文一】
绝望之处孕育的新生
高档的裙子被一个小小的烟头烧出了一个窟窿，看着完美作品转眼成空的你如何是好呢?或许你会咒骂那承担了千古罪名的烟头毁了你艺术的高峰，或许你会终日想着如何把它复原到起初无瑕的完美而再无新作诞生„„可是他却不一样，谁说这窟窿不是上帝仁慈的扶持?复制几个，饰以金边，一条“金边凤尾裙”把这裁缝推上了更高的云端。
世界很多时候就是这样，正如《无望井》一书里让我感触最深的一句话：“在最深的绝望中，你会看到最美丽的希望的星空。”绝望与希望本来就只差一线，以勇气挣开绝望的束缚，用心去拓展希望的疆域，一个人总能创造出意料之外也是情理之中的奇迹。
敌军的第五次围剿终于冲破了我军战士们死守的防线，人民的军队陷入了最大的危机中，这是令人绝望的黑暗。可是深知历史发展的我们都清楚，正是这次危机促成红军壮烈的二万五千里长征。在毛主席的领导下，人民军队在陕甘宁地区凭着地形的优势从此站稳了脚跟。更不用说，后来还在那里团结了西北人民强大的力量，成立了敌后根据地，给予了日本侵略者最沉重的打击。如此看来，这一危机不也是让党的军队真正扎根于广大农民群众的转机吗?
绝望的危机总能激发人最深最尖锐的智慧，而往往正是逼近中压力下迸发的思考照亮了漆黑一片的夜空。
我很佩服中国人民“置诸死地而后生”的见识与睿智，正如小说中虚竹的那一步棋，失了一大片疆土的同时却换得柳暗花明的新局面。人是应该有点放手的胸襟，为什么非要保住大手大脚的占地呢?为什么非要死守原来的绝妙呢?死守的结果可能是连原有的高度也不能保证，但敢于尝试新的路向却可能给予你更意想不到的“洞天之所”啊!又想起那孔明闻名于世的“空城计”，原有的势单力薄是绝望，但这智者并没有因此放弃，带着对司马懿的了解与放手一搏的信心，他大开城门，焚香弹琴，以出人意料的计谋赢得了漂亮的胜利。
挣开绝望吧，你就能看到希望的新光!
评语：本文以“绝望之处孕育的新生”为题，把握住裁缝在坏事出现后摆脱不利的局面，变废为宝这一材料重点，审题准确。文中组织多个材料，均扣住人们在绝望处如何通过主观努力，巧妙地化腐朽为神奇这一题意，论述语言自然流畅，语句使用准确到位，思路清晰，内容环环相扣。美中不足的是文章后半部分由于时间掌握不好，显得较仓促。
【样文二】 柳暗花明又一村
生命是一条没有回程的单行线，我们随着时间的齿轮滚动向前，有时我们会滚进“山重水复疑无路”的境地，但我们没有退路，无法回到从前，因此，只有用智慧，用努力，用永欢迎各位老师踊跃投稿，稿酬丰厚 邮箱：zxjkw@163.com
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不言弃，才能“柳暗花明又一村”。
我们要用智慧去面对残局困境。有一位粗心的裁缝在裁制高档裙子时不小心在上面烧了个窟窿，眼看就要损失惨重，他灵机一动，凭着他的智慧和高超手艺使裙子别具特色，备受追捧，生意自然也就十分红火。从这个故事里我们可以得到启发，假如在残局困难面前，不发挥智慧，那么就不是“山重水复疑无路”，而是“山重水复必无路”了。
我们要用努力去扭转残局，克服困难。不通过努力，再多的智慧也只能付诸东流，再多的智慧也无法扭转残局，走出困境。我们说霍金是一个有智慧的人，但与其说他有智慧，不如说他努力。他很小的时候已经残疾了，下半身动弹不了，即便是一个很有智慧的人面对这样的困境，抛弃努力又如何成功呢?因此，我们说努力是扭转残局，克服困难的重要因素。 我们更要用永不言弃态度去改变残局困境。试想一个人在山重水复疑无路时，高举双手向命运投降，这无异于等死!贝多芬作为一名音乐家，失聪对他来说无异于把他逼进“无路”之境，是什么令他坚持下来了?是什么让他凭着手感“摸”出音乐来?是什么令他在失陪以后还能创作出家喻户晓、广为流传的不朽作品?，正是他那永不言弃的积极态度帮他改变了残局，克服了困难，终于“柳暗花明又一村”。著名的残疾作家张海迪也是凭着她那在困难面前不低头，残局面前不气馁的积极态度，改变了一个又一个残局，克服了一个又一个困难，向世人证明了残疾人并非废人。经历风雨，又见彩虹。
生命继续进行着，时间的齿轮继续滚动着，当我们陷入“疑无路”之困境，不要只会后悔，不要只会气馁，用智慧，用努力，用永不言弃的态度，定能“柳暗花明又一村”。
评语：这篇文章立意准确，结构层次清晰。题目引用诗句，切合材料，并且在文章中多次扣题，灵活的运用表现了作者对材料理解得非常到位。论述过程中对三个分论点的论证有理有据，条理清晰。但美中不足的是文章语言表达还显平淡，文采不足。
【样文三】
意外与困难的门扉之后
当你不小心走上了计划外的道路，请相信“条条大路通罗马”的古语，满怀信心地往前走吧。
当被意外的风吹离了计划的航线，请看到陌生却又光亮的灯塔，清醒勇敢地掌好舵吧。
当被错误地地图带进了死胡同，请思考忽略的可能性吧，冷静沉着地越过阻碍。
因为，意外并不可怕，可怕的是向意外与困境投降。一位裁缝将高档裙子上烧出来的窟窿装饰一番，成为时髦的“金边凤尾裙”。你看，像这样的事情是存在的。我们从来不必向意外与困难投降，只要我们愿意挑战。
以一颗信心，迎着未知的意外与困难前进。麦哲伦完成环球航行，当中的惊险可想而知，然而在遇到困难及海上疾病时，他并没有放弃，甚至当机立断地改航道，意外地发现许多海峡海岛。画错的细节往往让画家们无所适从，然而妙手一挥，也可促成点睛之笔。关键是信心，信自己，也信生活，信这个机遇遍布的世界。
以一双亮眼，察觉意外与困难中潜藏的奇迹。炼丹师们造成的爆炸本是意外本是失败，却有人从中看到了可能，进而发明了火药。商机也是这样，善于观察，善于了解细节的眼盯上的，像刚开始不被看好的高科技产业、电脑市场，却能被有识之士看上。关键是敏锐的眼光，看细节，看世界，看这个广阔的未来。
以一身智慧，思索意外中埋藏着的道理与意义。尽管灵感是促成意外向成功转化的总是要因素，但更多时候，灵机一触不及深思熟虑可靠。从“推”与“敲”的思考中，我们了解到意外而来的难题，就像诗歌中的炼字，需要去想而不是横冲直撞。百事可乐公司总裁也曾陷入要将公司卖给可口可乐集团的困境，然而苦心经营几载，，终于还是用思想，用智慧垒起了公司的基业。关键是智慧的头脑，想问题，想方法，想这个世界的法则。
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生活本身就是意外的。有人去算一个人诞生于世的几率，分母已经可以用无限大去形容了。生活不可能摆脱意外。既然我们意外降生，从而活了下来，困境与意外，又有什么可怕的呢?
走吧。当生活向你开了一扇意外的，甚至是不好的门，面对艰难的前路，走下去，也总是有未来的。
门扉之后，将是一个新世界。
评语：本文在立意上属于切合题意，三个分论点能做到切合材料，其中所使用的事实论据能够支撑论点，但第二个分论点的论述稍有偏差。在表述上明显地见到该生在平时语言表达能力不错，如文章的题目、开头前三段和结尾都相当有文学味道，但有些繁复晦涩，造成表意不够流畅，不够明确。
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